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2014-04-03 · 첨삭 강사 Kristel

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I think it is necessary to learn swimming. It should not be happen but it could happen when you are in danger in the water. For example, you may have a cramp or have difficultly in breathing in the water. In that situation, having swimming skill could help you get out of that danger by yourself and ASAP. Also, knowing how to swim can help not to be afraid of water. I think there are more benefits than disadvantages in knowing how to swim. In my case, my mother let me learn swimming when I was seven. I remember that I used to drink strawberry or chocolate milk after the swimming classes. So I recommend you to learn swimming!:) Bye:)!!

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]!! A pleasant morning to you my dear~~ The most important part of this composition is you drinking strawberry and chocolate milk. haha! Certainly, you love foods! haha! Have a nice day, Ms. [Name]!!! T.Kristel- I think it is necessary to learn swimming. >> CORRECT!!It should not be happen but it could happen when you are in danger in the water. >> I hope not but it is possible that we might face dangers in the water.For example, you may have a cramp or have difficultly in breathing in the water. >> CORRECT!!In that situation, having swimming skill could help you get out of that danger by yourself and ASAP. >> In that situation, being able to swim could help you get out of that danger by yourself and ASAP.Also, knowing how to swim can help not to be afraid of water. >> CORRECT!!I think there are more benefits than disadvantages in knowing how to swim. >> I think there are more advantages than disadvantages of knowing how to swim.In my case, my mother let me learn swimming when I was seven. >> CORRECT!!I remember that I used to drink strawberry or chocolate milk after the swimming classes. >> CORRECT!!So I recommend you to learn swimming!:) >> CORRECT!!Bye:)!! >> CORRECT!!  

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