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2014-04-04 · 첨삭 강사 ali

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Hi Chelsea, It's raining now. so my office is really quite. And I must go to military service when next monday to wednesday. so I can't have class while I will be in there. I'm sorry. That military service is very tiresome. Anyway today's topic is "What is more important to make a lot of money or to enjoy your job? Why?" I was thought Important to unconditional make a money before I work. but I've been working now it is important a enjoy working than a lot of money. Money can't buy life so we must have to enjoy our life. Nowadays I hope to get a job that give more freetime to employee. I want the happy my life than a lot of money. What do you think about it? Have a nice day and goodnight. See you tomorrow. Bye.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!

Oh really? Sadly, I won\'t be having my class with you for 3 days. :(

But anyway, I certainly understand and I hope that your stay in the military service will be productive.

Always take an extra care!

I\'m excited to listen to all your stories about your activities in the military camp. :) Thanks for this well

said composition. I will let you know my answer tomorrow^^.

See you in class then!

T. Chelsea =)

Hi Chelsea,
>> CORRECT :)
It\'s raining now. so my office is really quite.
>> It\'s raining now so my office is really quiet.
And I must go to military service when next monday to wednesday. so I can\'t have class while I will be in there. I\'m sorry.

>> I must go to the military service next Monday until Wednesday so I won\'t be able to have a class with you while I\'m there. I\'m sorry.
That military service is very tiresome.
>> That military service is very tiring.
Anyway today\'s topic is \"What is more important to make a lot of money or to enjoy your job? Why?\"
>> Anyway, today\'s topic is \"What is more important to make a lot of money or to enjoy your job? Why?\"

I was thought Important to unconditional make a money before I work. but I\'ve been working now it is important a enjoy working than a lot of money.

>> DID YOU MEAN: Before, I thought that making a lot of money is the most important thing but I realized when I am already working that it is more important to enjoy your work than just making a lot of money.
Money can\'t buy life so we must have to enjoy our life.
>> Money can\'t buy happiness so we have to enjoy life.
Nowadays I hope to get a job that give more freetime to employee.

>> I hope that I\'ll get a job which gives more free time to their employees.
I want the happy my life than a lot of money.
>> I want a happy life than have a lot of money.
What do you think about it?
>> CORRECT :)

>> OR: What\'s your take about that?
Have a nice day and goodnight.
>> CORRECT :)
See you tomorrow. Bye.

>> CORRECT :)

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