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ESSAY: Do you think everybody should practice sports? I would like to say everybody should practice sports if they want to live longer and healthier. First reason, it helps blood circulation being well. If blood circulation is not good, it is one of the reason why he can easy to get a lot of illness. Second, it can help to reduce their stress. When people do exercise, their body secretes dopamine. And it makes their feeling well. For your information, the most secreted hormone is dopamine while people is in running. Hence, I and scientist recommend you to do sports regularly making our life happier.

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ESSAY: Do you think everybody should practice sports?

I would like to say everybody should practice sports if they want to live longer and healthier.

>> I would like to say that everybody should practice sports if they want to live longer and healthier.
First reason, it helps blood circulation being well. If blood circulation is not good, it is one of the reason why he can easy to get a lot of illness.

>>First reason, it helps the blood to circulate well. If blood circulation is not good, it will be one of the reasons why a person can easily get a lot of illness.
Second, it can help to reduce their stress. When people do exercise, their body secretes dopamine. And it makes their feeling well. For your information, the most secreted hormone is dopamine while people is in running.
>> Second, it can help reduce stress. When people exercise, their body secretes dopamine. And it makes them feel well.  For your information, the most secreted hormone is dopamine when people are running. 
Hence, I and scientist recommend you to do sports regularly making our life happier.

>> Hence, the scientists and I recommend you to do sports regularly to make our life happier.