Homework.

2014-04-24 · 첨삭 강사 Chelsea

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Hi there Chelsea. It's really hot today. It's comming summer, I will make a nice body well for my summer vacation. My homework's topic is "Are there more important issues than poverty? If so, name them in order of importance." I think that most important thing is satisfied in daily, because Poverty will solve to hard working. I've never seen that hungry people who hard working(= hard working people aren't hungry) So that is most important thing is satisfied, such as be happy, rest and be with lover. Actually first when i was until 30 age, I want to make a lot of money than satisfied. But after i get married, I want satisfied with my daily than money.kkkk Anyway It's so sunny today, Enjoy your day. Bye ~

강사 첨삭

Hi there^^ Thank you for doing your homework! I made some corrections and I hope I was able to meet all your points. I\'ll see you tomorrow! Enjoy the rest of your day! ~T.Chelsea Hi there Chelsea.>> CORRECT^^It\'s really hot today. >> CORRECT^^ It\'s comming summer, I will make a nice body well for my summer vacation.>> Summer is already approaching. I will make my body fir for summer vacation.My homework\'s topic is \"Are there more important issues than poverty? If so, name them in order of importance.\">> CORRECT^^I think that most important thing is satisfied in daily, because Poverty will solve to hard working. >> I think the most important thing is being satisfied everyday becayse povery will be solved through hard work. I\'ve never seen that hungry people who hard working(= hard working people aren\'t hungry)>> I\'ve never seen hardworking people get hungry.So that is most important thing is satisfied, such as be happy, rest and be with lover.>> So, the most important thing is to be satisfied, such as being happy, taking rest and be with you love one.Actually first when i was until 30 age, I want to make a lot of money than satisfied. >> Actually, the first thing I want before I reach the age of 30 is to earn a lot of money.But after i get married, I want satisfied with my daily than money.kkkk>> But after I get married, I want to be satisfied with the money I earn everyday. Kkkk.Anyway It\'s so sunny today, Enjoy your day. Bye ~ >> CORRECT^^

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