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2014-05-27 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Would you describe yourself as a workaholic? I want to be a nice worker. When I was young I thought that work was important in life. I didn't want to stay just as a house wife. My grandmother said house wife is best work so you'd like to be it. However, I can't understand it at that time. When I got a job, I was very happy. I worked hard and I loved my work. Although there were a lot of pains, it was no matter. I really enjoyed my work. But I lost my first intention now so it is too say. I thought about my work everyday long time ago. Therefore I was like a workaholic. If I didn't finish my work, I worked late as I didin't leave. Some day, I also worked at my house. I gave up my holiday or weekend for work. My superior said you look workaholic. I'd like to say that was just passion. Theseday I go home straight. I finish my work on time. My work is familiar. Actually, work is important now but it is not all. If I have to choice just one between work and family, I will prefer the latter.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [Name]!
Good morning to you!
Well, it is good to know that you are not workaholic now.
And I think that you don\'t have to be one.
You have to concentrate on your family and you having a baby.
I think that it should be your priority now rather than work.
And I am happy to know that you are choosing your family than the your work.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
See you later!
Have a great day ahead!

Always,
Kathrine ^^

Would you describe yourself as a workaholic?

I want to be a nice worker.
>>  correct!
When I was young I thought that work was important in life.

>>  correct!
 I didn\'t want to stay just as a house wife.

>>  correct!
>> or: I didn\'t want to be just a house wife.
My grandmother said house wife is best work so you\'d like to be it.

>>  My grandmother said that being a house wife is the best work so I have to like it.
However, I can\'t understand it at that time.

>>  However, I did not understand it at that time.
When I got a job, I was very happy.

>>  correct!
I worked hard and I loved my work.

>>  correct! 
Although there were a lot of pains, it was no matter.

>>  Although there were a lot of pain, it did not matter.
I really enjoyed my work.

>>  correct! 
But I lost my first intention now so it is too say.

>>  But I lost my first priority now so it is too easy to say.
I thought about my work everyday long time ago.

>>  I am thinking about my work everyday for a long time.
Therefore I was like a workaholic.

>>  correct!
If I didn\'t finish my work, I worked late as I didin\'t leave.

>>  If I didn\'t finish my work, I have to work late.
>> or: If I didn\'t finish my work, I leave my work very late.
Some day, I also worked at my house.

>>  I also work at home sometimes.
I gave up my holiday or weekend for work.

>>  correct!
My superior said you look workaholic.

>>  My superior said that I look like a workaholic.
 I\'d like to say that was just passion.

>>  I\'d like to say that it is just my passion to work.
Theseday I go home straight.

>>  These days, I go home straight.
>> or; These days, I go straight to home.
I finish my work on time.

>>  correct!
>> or: I  am finishing my work on time.
 My work is familiar.

>>  correct! 
Actually, work is important now but it is not all.

>>  Actually, work is important now but that is not all.
 If I have to choice just one between work and family, I will prefer the latter.

>>  If I have to choose between work and family, I will prefer the latter.
>> or: If I have to make a choice
between work and family, I will prefer the latter. 

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