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2014-05-29 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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What do you think is the rationale why Children's Day is considered a national holiday in South Korea while Parents' Day isn't? Do you think it should be considered as a national holiday? Why or why not? I think Children's Day was made as a national holiday because children are important to Korea. Children are the future of the country. They have lots of potentials. We ,as adults, have an obligation to protect children and support them to find their own way. There is another possible reason for this. Children's day became a national holiday so as to let parents take their day off to spend time with their children. As you might be aware, Korean people tend to work late, so they don't have much time to play with their children. In this regard, I think Parents' Day should be considered as a national holiday to make it possible for people to spend more time with their family.

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Hi there, Ms. [이름]! Thank you for your composition today! Now I know that you\'re really picking the topics at random. Try the homework about Cinderella. I\'d like to know your own version of it. Take care and have fun! T. JanE ^^ What do you think is the rationale why Children\'s Day is considered a national holiday in South Korea while Parents\' Day isn\'t? Do you think it should be considered as a national holiday? Why or why not?>> Correct I think Children\'s Day was made as a national holiday because children are important to Korea. >> I think Children\'s Day was made as a national holiday in Korea because children are important in Korea.  Children are the future of the country. >> Correct They have lots of potentials. >> Correct We, as adults, have an obligation to protect children and support them to find their own way. >> Correct There is another possible reason for this. >> Correct Children\'s day became a national holiday so as to let parents take their day off to spend time with their children. >> Correct As you might be aware, Korean people tend to work late, so they don\'t have much time to play with their children. >> Correct In this regard, I think Parents\' Day should be considered as a national holiday to make it possible for people to spend more time with their family. >> Correct  

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