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Do you think sending your loved ones to nursing homes is a kind of abandonment?
My grandmother is 83 years old. She can cook and do laundary alone. She alos doesn't want to go to any nursing home. If her friend go to there, she say it is very bad. Thesedays, many young people think that they can send their parents to nursing home. I think so, too. Actually, if they can live alone, it is not a matter. However, if they are sick and can't do anything, they need a nursing home. Their chilren can care of them becasue they have to go to work. Also, their knowledge is not good about illness or medicine. I hear that there are a lot of great nursing home. There are good doctors, nurses and carers in there. But I just can't help thinking parents happiness. Which is the better? My parents brought me up although they were busy and hard to work. I know that it is good choice to care of them myself. They will be happy with me. I hope that my parents will be healthy. I'd like to return thier favor.
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Great Monday Ms. [Name]
How is your day at work?
Hope you are having a good time.
For me, it is better that young people should take care of their parents than letting them go to nursing homes.
Some children nowadays are doing this kind of thing to their parents/loved ones especially when they are already old or sick.
The reason is that they don\'t want to be burdened taking care of them because they are busy at work.
But this is not that reasonable enough just to leave their loved ones to nursing homes.
Our old parents/loved ones need to be taken care of by the family members.
And the family members should show their respect, kindness and love to them by taking care of them.
It is also the best way of returning the love, and care that they have given us when we were young.
And I do hope that in the future, my children would take care of me and not let me go to a nursing homes.
Thanks for your time today Ms. [Name]! ^^
See you tomorrow! Take care!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Do you think sending your loved ones to nursing homes is a kind of abandonment?
My grandmother is 83 years old.
>> correct!
She can cook and do laundary alone.
>> She can cook and do the laundry alone.
She alos doesn\'t want to go to any nursing home.
>> She also doesn\'t want to go to any nursing homes.
If her friend go to there, she say it is very bad.
>> If her friend goes there, she says that it is very bad.
Thesedays, many young people think that they can send their parents to nursing home.
>> These days, many young people think that they can send their parents to a nursing home.
I think so, too.
>> correct!
Actually, if they can live alone, it is not a matter.
>> Actually, if they can live alone, it does not matter.
However, if they are sick and can\'t do anything, they need a nursing home.
>> correct!
Their chilren can care of them becasue they have to go to work.
>> Their children cannot take care of them because they have to go to work.
Also, their knowledge is not good about illness or medicine.
>> correct!
>> or: They also do not have the knowledge about the illness or the medicine.
I hear that there are a lot of great nursing home.
>> I heard that there are a lo to great nursing homes.
There are good doctors, nurses and carers in there.
>> There are good doctors, nurses and care givers there.
But I just can\'t help thinking parents happiness.
>> But I just can\'t help thing about the parents happiness.
Which is the better?
>> Which is better?
My parents brought me up although they were busy and hard to work.
>> My parents brought me up although there busy and working hard.
I know that it is good choice to care of them myself.
>> I know that it is a good choice to take care of them by myself.
They will be happy with me.
>> correct!
I hope that my parents will be healthy.
>> correct!
I\'d like to return thier favor.
>> I\'d like to return the favor.
How is your day at work?
Hope you are having a good time.
For me, it is better that young people should take care of their parents than letting them go to nursing homes.
Some children nowadays are doing this kind of thing to their parents/loved ones especially when they are already old or sick.
The reason is that they don\'t want to be burdened taking care of them because they are busy at work.
But this is not that reasonable enough just to leave their loved ones to nursing homes.
Our old parents/loved ones need to be taken care of by the family members.
And the family members should show their respect, kindness and love to them by taking care of them.
It is also the best way of returning the love, and care that they have given us when we were young.
And I do hope that in the future, my children would take care of me and not let me go to a nursing homes.
Thanks for your time today Ms. [Name]! ^^
See you tomorrow! Take care!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Do you think sending your loved ones to nursing homes is a kind of abandonment?
My grandmother is 83 years old.
>> correct!
She can cook and do laundary alone.
>> She can cook and do the laundry alone.
She alos doesn\'t want to go to any nursing home.
>> She also doesn\'t want to go to any nursing homes.
If her friend go to there, she say it is very bad.
>> If her friend goes there, she says that it is very bad.
Thesedays, many young people think that they can send their parents to nursing home.
>> These days, many young people think that they can send their parents to a nursing home.
I think so, too.
>> correct!
Actually, if they can live alone, it is not a matter.
>> Actually, if they can live alone, it does not matter.
However, if they are sick and can\'t do anything, they need a nursing home.
>> correct!
Their chilren can care of them becasue they have to go to work.
>> Their children cannot take care of them because they have to go to work.
Also, their knowledge is not good about illness or medicine.
>> correct!
>> or: They also do not have the knowledge about the illness or the medicine.
I hear that there are a lot of great nursing home.
>> I heard that there are a lo to great nursing homes.
There are good doctors, nurses and carers in there.
>> There are good doctors, nurses and care givers there.
But I just can\'t help thinking parents happiness.
>> But I just can\'t help thing about the parents happiness.
Which is the better?
>> Which is better?
My parents brought me up although they were busy and hard to work.
>> My parents brought me up although there busy and working hard.
I know that it is good choice to care of them myself.
>> I know that it is a good choice to take care of them by myself.
They will be happy with me.
>> correct!
I hope that my parents will be healthy.
>> correct!
I\'d like to return thier favor.
>> I\'d like to return the favor.
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