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2014-06-10 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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What makes someone beautiful? The best thing that makes someone beautiful is a warm heart. When we see someone in grief, we feel sorry for him or her. So, we can know that we have abilities to feel emotions of others. We are born to sympathize with each other. The more we care about others, the more we can be happy. The happiness from peace of mind makes us beautiful.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]! It\'s a another beautiful day! Thanks for sending me this. I agree with you. Beauty is not just based on one\'s physical appearance. We must also consider one\'s inner self. Well, it was said that everything has beauty but the problem is not everyone sees it. See you later!   ~Teacher Shanee   What makes someone beautiful? The best thing that makes someone beautiful is a warm heart. >>Correct! When we see someone in grief, we feel sorry for him or her. >>Correct! So, we can know that we have abilities to feel emotions of others. >>Correct! We are born to sympathize with each other. >>Correct! The more we care about others, the more we can be happy. >>Correct! The happiness from peace of mind makes us beautiful. >>Correct!

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