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Where do you see yourself when you are 70 years old and what are you doing?
I heard that the average life expectancy of women in my country is 80 years. My grandmother in her eighties said sixties is young. HAHAHA. My retiremnet age is sixty two years old but I can retire early. I don't know about my future but I hope happy life. My life will not change bigly. I will study something continually such as drawing, flower arrangement, sewing and so on. I will enjoy sports such as swimming, yoga and so on. Although my age will be old, my mind will be young. KKK. I want to live with my husband to the end. I will go on a trip around the world with him. Actually I will do it continually from now. This is because physical strength is important to travel so we must be healthy. My husband want to live beautiful island, Jeju in the future. We'd like to just eat, walk and reading everyday in there. I think that I want to live now like my dream future. Therefore I'll enjoy at the present.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon Ms. [Name]!
Wow! What a great future are you thinking of?
And I do really hope that you could do that together with your husband.
Age is just a number and I agree with you.
But if you will have a healthy mind and young heart, you would still feel young even if you reach that age.
Thanks for that wonderful composition.
See you again tomorrow!
Take care!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Where do you see yourself when you are 70 years old and what are you doing?
I heard that the average life expectancy of women in my country is 80 years.
>> correct!
My grandmother in her eighties said sixties is young. HAHAHA.
>> My grandmother in her eighties said that women in their sixties are young. HAHAHA.
My retiremnet age is sixty two years old but I can retire early.
>> My retirement age is 62 but I can retire early.
I don\'t know about my future but I hope happy life.
>> I don\'t know about my future but I hope a happy life.
My life will not change bigly.
>> My life will not have a big change.
I will study something continually such as drawing, flower arrangement, sewing and so on.
>> I will study something continually such as drawing, flower arranging, sewing and so on.
I will enjoy sports such as swimming, yoga and so on.
>> correct!
Although my age will be old, my mind will be young. KKK.
>> correct!
>> or: Although I am old, my mind would be young. kkk
I want to live with my husband to the end.
>> correct!
I will go on a trip around the world with him.
>> correct!
Actually I will do it continually from now.
>> correct!
This is because physical strength is important to travel so we must be healthy.
>> correct!
My husband want to live beautiful island, Jeju in the future.
>> My husband wants to live in the beautiful island in Jeju in the future.
We\'d like to just eat, walk and reading everyday in there.
>> We would just like to eat, walk, and read everyday there.
I think that I want to live now like my dream future.
>> I think that I want to live now like my in the dream future.
Therefore I\'ll enjoy at the present.
>> correct!
Wow! What a great future are you thinking of?
And I do really hope that you could do that together with your husband.
Age is just a number and I agree with you.
But if you will have a healthy mind and young heart, you would still feel young even if you reach that age.
Thanks for that wonderful composition.
See you again tomorrow!
Take care!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Where do you see yourself when you are 70 years old and what are you doing?
I heard that the average life expectancy of women in my country is 80 years.
>> correct!
My grandmother in her eighties said sixties is young. HAHAHA.
>> My grandmother in her eighties said that women in their sixties are young. HAHAHA.
My retiremnet age is sixty two years old but I can retire early.
>> My retirement age is 62 but I can retire early.
I don\'t know about my future but I hope happy life.
>> I don\'t know about my future but I hope a happy life.
My life will not change bigly.
>> My life will not have a big change.
I will study something continually such as drawing, flower arrangement, sewing and so on.
>> I will study something continually such as drawing, flower arranging, sewing and so on.
I will enjoy sports such as swimming, yoga and so on.
>> correct!
Although my age will be old, my mind will be young. KKK.
>> correct!
>> or: Although I am old, my mind would be young. kkk
I want to live with my husband to the end.
>> correct!
I will go on a trip around the world with him.
>> correct!
Actually I will do it continually from now.
>> correct!
This is because physical strength is important to travel so we must be healthy.
>> correct!
My husband want to live beautiful island, Jeju in the future.
>> My husband wants to live in the beautiful island in Jeju in the future.
We\'d like to just eat, walk and reading everyday in there.
>> We would just like to eat, walk, and read everyday there.
I think that I want to live now like my dream future.
>> I think that I want to live now like my in the dream future.
Therefore I\'ll enjoy at the present.
>> correct!
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