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Here is my life game plan from now. Within a year, I will get a job first. After about three to five years, I will move to international organization such as United Nations or World Bank. In order to make a successful career in profession, I will marry in late 30's and have two children; son and daughter each.
My life with growing children and a husband will continue back to Korea. About 20 years later, my children is going to be independent from me and my husband and we will spend a fun but peaceful time together.
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Hi there, Ms. [Name]!
Thank you for your composition! That\'s a good game plan! I hope you can ursue it. Take care and have a nice day!
T. JanE ^^
Here is my life game plan from now.
>> Here is my game plan for now.
Within a year, I will get a job first.
>> Correct
After about three to five years, I will move to international organization such as United Nations or World Bank.
>> Correct
In order to make a successful career in profession, I will marry in late 30\'s and have two children; son and daughter each.
>> In order to make a successful career in my profession, I will marry in my late 30s and I will have two children: a son and a daughter.
My life with growing children and a husband will continue back to Korea.
>> My life with my groeing children will continue back in Korea.
About 20 years later, my children is going to be independent from me and my husband and we will spend a fun but peaceful time together.
>> About 20 years later, my children will be independent from me and my husband, and we will spend fun and peaceful time together.
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