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2014-06-13 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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What are some reasons why privacy is important for you? I usually share my life and I have a open mind. Although I have this thinking, I'd like to be protected from ohter people. I write a diary sometime. I can release my stress while writing it. Therefore the content is very sad, painful and bad. I never want anybody read it even my husband. But I want to know all of my husband.kkk Theesedays many people use SNS and I also use it. I post my pictures of daily life. In my case, I open it to just my friends or family members. Some of friends open it to all of people. I think that the range of privacy is different depending on the person or nation. Asian usually don't take care of it deeply but westerner concerned about that. When I learned English, teachers said I don't ask about job, salary, size of house. This is because it is invasion of privacy. Everyone has some secret and they want to keep it. So I do. Therefore we share our life, but don't touch sharp problem. But it's not easy.

강사 첨삭

Happy Friday Ms. [Name]!
Well, culture is different when it comes to the Asians and Westerners.
Privacy depends on the person and on which country he or she belongs.
So I agree with your idea.
Hope you\'ll have a great weekend too.
Enjoy your free time!
See you next time and take care!
Always,
Kathrine ^^

What are some reasons why privacy is important for you?
I usually share my life and I have a open mind.
>>  correct!
Although I have this thinking, I\'d like to be protected from ohter people.

>>  correct! (other)
I write a diary sometime.

>>  I sometimes write a diary.
I can release my stress while writing it.

>>   correct!
Therefore the content is very sad, painful and bad.

>>  correct!
 I never want anybody read it even my husband.

>>  I never want anybody to read it even my husband.
But I want to know all of my husband.kkk

>>  But I want to know everyhting about my husband. KKK
Theesedays many people use SNS and I also use it.

>>  These days, may people are using SNS and I am also using it.
I post my pictures of daily life.

>>  I post my daily life pictures.
In my case, I open it to just my friends or family members.

>>  correct!
Some of friends open it to all of people.

>>  Some of my friends open it all to other people.
 I think that the range of privacy is different depending on the person or nation.

>> correct!
Asian usually don\'t take care of it deeply but westerner concerned about that.

>>  Asians usually do not care about it deeply but Westerners are concerned about it.
When I learned English, teachers said I don\'t ask about job, salary, size of house.

>> When I learned English, teachers said I don\'t have to ask about the job, salary, or the  size of their house.
This is because it is invasion of privacy.

>>  correct!
Everyone has some secret and they want to keep it.

>>  correct!
So I do.
>> correct!
Therefore we share our life, but don\'t touch sharp problem.

>>  Therefore, we share our life but we do not have to touch the sensitive problems.
But it\'s not easy.

>>  correct!

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