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2014-07-04 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Some people get motivation from people close to them who encourage them. Some get motivation from wanting to prove someone else wrong. Who would you love to see you succeed? Who would you love to see fail? Which of these is more powerful motivation? Especially, motivation is very important to kids. We need to give positive feeback to them. I think that it is not big part to adult. However, when we share our success, these will be more two times. When we share sorrow, it may not be half. Men seem to get motivation from thier boss. It is related to promotion. Otherwise thier collegues are jealous to their success. Therefore, if they love to see thier colleague's fail. Of cours, I want to believe that there are good person more much. In my case, my plan, decision and purpose is most important. Anyway, if I get motivation from my family mebers, friends and neibor, I really do it well. I can't deny the power. I also want that nobody love to see my fail. Thank you. Have a nice weekend.

강사 첨삭

Great afternoon Ms. [Name]!

People are motivated by different reasons either power or by the people whom they love.

It is good to know that those people around you and those whom you love are the one\'s who motivate you.

Thanks for your time and see you next week.
Enjoy your weekend!


Always,

Kathrine ^^

Some people get motivation from people close to them who encourage them. Some get motivation from wanting to prove someone else wrong. Who would you love to see you succeed? Who would you love to see fail? Which of these is more powerful motivation?

Especially, motivation is very important to kids.

>>  Motivation is especially important to kids.

We need to give positive feeback to them.

>>  correct! (feedback)

I think that it is not big part to adult.

>>  I think that it is not a big part to adults.

However, when we share our success, these will be more two times.

>>  However, when we share our success, it will become twice.

When we share sorrow, it may not be half.

>>  When we share our sorrow, it cannot be divided into half.

Men seem to get motivation from thier boss.

>>  correct! (their)

It is related to promotion.

>>  correct!

Otherwise thier collegues are jealous to their success.

>>  Otherwise, their colleagues are jealous of their success.

Therefore, if they love to see thier colleague\'s fail.

>>  Therefore, they love to see their colleague\'s fail.

Of cours, I want to believe that there are good person more much.

>>  of course, I want to believe that there are a lot of good people.

In my case, my plan, decision and purpose is most important.

>>  In my case, my plan, decision and purpose is most important.

Anyway, if I get motivation from my family mebers, friends and neibor, I really do it well.

>>  correct! (members, neighbors)

I can\'t deny the power.

>>  correct!

I also want that nobody love to see my fail.

>>  I also want to nobody would see me fail.

Thank you. Have a nice weekend.

>>  correct!

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