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2014-07-16 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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How long do you think is a reasonable time for children to rely on their parents financially? You can discuss your answer both depending on age, and also the situation. I know that it differ with countries. I heard that young people are independent of their parents ealry in western countries but my country not. My youngest brother has relying on his parents until now because he is student. Although he lives alone but he recieve pocket money and house rents from parents. My friend is financially independent of her parents but she lives with her parents in parents house. There are various situations. I don't know which is better. Bye the way, parents are worried about their children's economic independence like job and marriage. This is because childrens usually stand alone when they get marriage in Korea. Finally, good method is getting marriage after having a job. Age is not important but I prefer under 30. Actually, it is differnt depending on people. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon Ms. [Name]

Anyway, children should learn how to be independent from their parents one they graduate from high school.

Since they are already old enough and they can think what would be good for themselves.

And thanks for your time today Ms., Anne
See you again tomorrow!


Always,

Kathrine ^^



How long do you think is a reasonable time for children to rely on their parents financially? You can discuss your answer both depending on age, and also the situation.


 I know that it differ with countries.

>>  I know that it is different  with other  countries.

 I heard that young people are independent of their parents ealry in western countries but my country not.

>> I heard that young people are independent of their parents ealry in western countries but my country  is not.

My youngest brother has relying on his parents until now because he is student.

>> My youngest brother has been relying  with our  parents until now because he is a student.

Although he lives alone but he recieve pocket money and house rents from parents.

>> Although he lives alone but he recieve pocket money and house rents from our  parents.

My friend is financially independent of her parents but she lives with her parents in parents house.

>> correct!

There are various situations.

>> correct!

 I don\'t know which is better.

>> correct!

Bye the way, parents are worried about their children\'s economic independence like job and marriage.

>> correct!

This is because childrens usually stand alone when they get marriage in Korea.

>> This is because childrens usually stand alone when they get married in Korea.

Finally, good method is getting marriage after having a job.

>> correct!

Age is not important but I prefer under 30.

>> correct!

Actually, it is differnt depending on people. Thank you.

>> correct!

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