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2014-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Childhood is certainly the happiest time of your life. When I was young I hear that the happiest time is childhood in your life. However I want to be adult quickly. I thought if I would be an adult, I can do everything for myself at that time. I expected university life, date, marriage life and so on. Now, I am an adult and I live very complicatedly. But I am satisfied my life now. This is because there is happiness at the moment. When I was childhood, my parents took a care of me so I was happy. When I was adolescence, I got a stress because of my studies. Nevertheless, I was happy with my friends whos shared our pains together. Although it was not easy but I got a job after graduation. And then, I got married though it was not easy, too. I think if we can feel happy right now, we are happy person. Bye the way, I'd like to tell young people that enjoy your life now and this moment because the time won't come back again. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [Name]!
Well, for me childhood is the happiest in my life.

I was able to enjoy my childhood days, playing around, goofing around, not being serious at school and just being with my friends.
Because I was still young and I am not thinking of serious matters.

But I guess children nowadays do not enjoy their childhood day because they are pressured too much to study.

Anyway, I hope your children in the future would enjoy their childhood something.

Thanks you time and see you tomorrow!


Always,
Kathrine ^^


Childhood is certainly the happiest time of your life.


 When I was young I hear that the happiest time is childhood in your life.

>>  When I was young, I heard that the happiest time in our life is during our childhood.

However I want to be adult quickly.

>>  However, I wanted to be an adult quickly.

I thought if I would be an adult, I can do everything for myself at that time.

>>  correct!

I expected university life, date, marriage life and so on.

>>  I expected the university life, dating, getting married, and so on.

Now, I am an adult and I live very complicatedly.

>>  Now that I am an adult, life is very complicated.

But I am satisfied my life now.

>>  But I am now satisfied with my life.

This is because there is happiness at the moment.

>>  correct!

>> or: It is because I am happy at the moment.

When I was childhood, my parents took a care of me so I was happy.

>>  When I was a child, my parents took a care of me so I was happy.

When I was adolescence, I got a stress because of my studies.

>>   When I was an adolescent, I was stressed a lot because of my studies.

Nevertheless, I was happy with my friends whos shared our pains together.

>>  Nevertheless, I was happy with my friends whom I shared our pains together.

Although it was not easy but I got a job after graduation.

>>  correct!

And then, I got married though it was not easy, too.

>>  correct!

I think if we can feel happy right now, we are happy person.

>>  I think that if we can be happy at the moment, then we are a happy person.

Bye the way, I\'d like to tell young people that enjoy your life now and this moment because the time won\'t come back again. Thank you.

>>  By the way, I\'d like to tell the young people to enjoy their lives at the moment because they could not turn back the time. Thank you.

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