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2014-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Regardless of whether or not you are religious, do you believe that there is an almighty God controlling our world? This world is very evil so we think that there is no almighty God. Is it right? No, I don't think so. I'm a christian. Although we live in the world that seems to like there is no God but I belive that there is God. Why is there war, poverty and famin though there is God in the world. There are a lot of things that we can't understand. I think it is due to man's greedy. We have to live good intentions. Actually it is not easy because we are not good. We have to get it from God. Although, it looks same between non christian and christian now. However, there is heaven and hell and we will be judged by God. I don't force my thinking. It is just my belief. I think it is very sensitive part. But now, almighty God is controlling our world. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon again Ms. [Name]!

Thanks for sharing your thoughts about our topic.

Well, people really do have different perspective when it comes to God.

And we do also have different reason either He is existing or not.

Anyway, thanks for your time today.
See you next time!


Always,

Kathrine ^^

 


Regardless of whether or not you are religious, do you believe that there is an almighty God controlling our world?

This world is very evil so we think that there is no almighty God.

>>  correct!

Is it right? No, I don\'t think so. I\'m a christian.

>>  correct! 

Although we live in the world that seems to like there is no God but I belive that there is God.

>>  Although we are living in a world that seems that there is no God, I would still believe that there is a God.

Why is there war, poverty and famin though there is God in the world.

>>  correct! (famine)

There are a lot of things that we can\'t understand.

>>  correct!

I think it is due to man\'s greedy.

>>  I think that it is because of man\'s greediness.

We have to live good intentions.

>>  We have to live with good intentions.

Actually it is not easy because we are not good.

>>  Actually, it is not easy because we are not good.

We have to get it from God.

>>  correct!

Although, it looks same between non christian and christian now.

>>  Although it looks the same between Christian and non-Christian now.

However, there is heaven and hell and we will be judged by God.

>>  correct!

I don\'t force my thinking. It is just my belief.

>>  I will not force myself to think. It is just my belief.

I think it is very sensitive part.

>>  I think that it is a very sensitive issue.

But now, almighty God is controlling our world. Thank you.

>>  correct!

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