homework

2014-07-24 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

학생이 쓴 원문

Describe to me in detail your most unforgettable travel. Last year in September, I and my girlfriend headed to Chuncheon, the city of lakes. In Chuncheon, we rode a kayak together. The lake was fascinating and beautiful, so we really could enjoy our time. We took many photos, and we had the photos developed after the trip. With the developed photos, we made our photo album. We really cherish the book thinking of the day. I [이름] never forget the day forever.

강사 첨삭

Happy Thursday, [이름]!

 

For most people, traveling makes them happy.

But in my case, I am actually a homebody. So I don\'t really like traveling a lot.

I only travel when it concerns something very important or when I am with the persons I love.

For me, traveling becomes interesting and unforgettable if I do it with the important people in my life.

 

Thank you for sharing your most unforgettable travel. Maybe what made that travel most unforgettable was not the mere scenery but the fact that you were with your girlfriend. I hope that you\'ll have more worth remembering travels with your loved ones.

 

See you later in class!

 

~Teacher Shanee

 

 

Describe to me in detail your most unforgettable travel.

Last year in September, I and my girlfriend headed to Chuncheon, the city of lakes.

>>> Correct! (my girlfriend and I)

In Chuncheon, we rode a kayak together.

>>> Correct!

The lake was fascinating and beautiful, so we really could enjoy our time.

>>> The lake was fascinating and beautiful, so we really enjoyed our time.

We took many photos, and we had the photos developed after the trip.

>>> Correct!

With the developed photos, we made our photo album.

>>> Correct!

We really cherish the book thinking of the day.

>>> We really cherish that day when we created our photo album. (I\'m not really sure what you mean in this sentence.)

I [이름] never forget the day forever.

>>> Correct!

>>> OR: I [이름] treasure that day forever.

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