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2014-07-24 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Absolutely, i don't agree these. Until now, most people in their life, we saw the diet will experience. If there are the efforts of individuals, obesity isn't occur. For example, when i was a kid, i was a fat. And i was unhealthy. So i tried to excercise for myself because i think that this shouldn't be alive. Before health so hard and now i have a healthy body. Therefore,obesity isn't a disease.

강사 첨삭

Hi there my dear [이름], thank you so much for your time in making your homework...

I commend you always for a job well done.

Please keep up the good work...

Talk to you again tomorrow and have a great day...

xoxoTeacher cam^^

Absolutely, i don\'t agree these.

>>I absolutely don\'t agree with this.
 Until now, most people in their life, we saw the diet will experience.

>>Nowadays, most people go for a diet.
 If there are the efforts of individuals, obesity isn\'t occur.

>>If people do something about this, they wont get obese.

For example, when i was a kid, i was a fat.

>>correct

Just observe the proper capitalization of I.

And i was unhealthy.

>>correct

Just observe the proper capitalization of I.

So i tried to excercise for myself because i think that this shouldn\'t be alive.

>>So I tried to exercise not to experience this.

Before health so hard and now i have a healthy body.

>>Before I was not healthy and I believe already have a healthy body.
 Therefore,obesity isn\'t a disease.

>>correct

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