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2014-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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Critics of my proposal may argue that raise the minimum wage to W10,000 is too much. However, I think it is a psychological egoism causes us to desire or pursue only our self-interest and also rule worship. I think these attitudes make the bad phenomenon. Of course, The general happiness which considers all people is the most important. We call it "justice". So I think the impartial value of the world consists the well being of all the individuals in this world. And we have the moral obligation to promote happiness and the absence of pain to all people. Peter Singer argues that "If it is in our power to prevent something very bad from happening, without sacrificing anything of comparable moral importance, we ought, morally, to do it." I completely agree with him. All humans have equal rights. And we should give until we reach the level of marginal utility. We can prevent or reduce death by starvation by donating to charities the money we spend in buying luxuries.

강사 첨삭

Hi! Here\'s the third part. I think I\'ve checked the other parts of it last time. Please go over it. ^^, ~T. Jessie~ Critics of my proposal may argue that raise the minimum wage to W10,000 is too much. >> Critics of my proposal may argue that raising the minimum wage to W10,000 is too much. However, I think it is a psychological egoism causes us to desire or pursue only our self-interest and also rule worship. >> However, I think it is  psychological egoism which causes us to desire or pursue only our self-interest. OR>> Do you mean: However, I think it is  psychological egoism which causes us to desire or pursue only our self-interest and to long for someone to worship us. I think these attitudes make the bad phenomenon. >> Correct! OR>> I think these attitudes caused the phenomenon. Of course, The general happiness which considers all people is the most important. >> Of course, the general happiness which considers all people is the most important. OR>> Of course, the happiness of the majority is more important. We call it \"justice\". >> Correct! So I think the impartial value of the world consists the well being of all the individuals in this world. >> Correct! And we have the moral obligation to promote happiness and the absence of pain to all people. >> Correct! Peter Singer argues that \"If it is in our power to prevent something very bad from happening, without sacrificing anything of comparable moral importance, we ought, morally, to do it.\" >> Correct! I completely agree with him. >> Correct! All humans have equal rights. >> Correct! And we should give until we reach the level of marginal utility. >> Correct! We can prevent or reduce death by starvation by donating to charities the money we spend in buying luxuries. >> Correct!

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