homework :)
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK FOR THE DAY:
If you were going away for a long time and you have to say good bye to your family or friends, what would you tell them and how would you feel? Elaborate your answer.
Dear my family.
I will go away for a year so I will miss you very much.
Father and mother, Don't be sad or lonely although I'm not here.
Maybe, time will go very fast. The day when we meet again will come soon.
When I'm back, I will be a more reliable daughter.
Don't worry about me so much:-)
Brother, while I'm not here, help parents a lot.
Study hard and don't get home late.
When I'm back, let's go shopping and go to the movies together.
I love you so much.♥
Dear my best friends.
Hey, I'm so sorry that we can't meet for a year.
I will miss you so much and maybe I will realize how precious you are.
Although we can't meet for a long time, I believe our friendship will be deep.
I'll buy your presents. Expect! kkk :)
When I'm back, make more memories. I love you.
강사 첨삭
Lisa!
Hello there my wonderful student :)
It\'s Monday again. And yes, we have to study again :))
I hope you had a very relaxing weekend meeting your friends last time.
So, let\'s get back to work. :D
As for your homework, all I can say is --- WOW!
You really did a great job in making this letter. It is very meaningful, it has life and it has your heart!
Congratulations!!!! :))
I am very sure that your parents are very proud of you. You are a blessing to your family!
And of course, I\'m sure your friends are lucky to have you around.
I know you are a beautiful person inside out. :))
CORRECTIONS:
Dear my family.
>> Dear my family, **Use a comma for personal letters and a colon for formal and business letters
OR>> To my family,
I will go away for a year so I will miss you very much.
>>CORRECT
OR>> I\'ll be leaving for a year so I will miss you a lot.
Father and mother, Don\'t be sad or lonely although I\'m not here.
>> CORRECT
BETTER>> Father and mother, don\'t be sad or lonely even if I\'m not around.
Maybe, time will go very fast. The day when we meet again will come soon.
>> Maybe, time will go very fast and the day when we meet again will come soon.
OR>> Time flies fast and we will meet again soon.
When I\'m back, I will be a more reliable daughter.
>> CORRECT **I like the adjective you used :)
Don\'t worry about me so much:-)
>> CORRECT
Brother, while I\'m not here, help parents a lot.
>> Brother, while I\'m not here, help our parents a lot.
OR>> Brother, while I\'m not here, help our parents all the time.
Study hard and don\'t get home late.
>> CORRECT
When I\'m back, let\'s go shopping and go to the movies together.
>> CORRECT **Sweet sister :)
OR>> When I got back...
I love you so much.♥
>> CORRECT :))
Or>> You are always in my heart.
Dear my best friends.
>> Dear best friends,
Hey, I\'m so sorry that we can\'t meet for a year.
>> CORRECT :)
OR>> Hey, I\'m so sorry that we won\'t meet for a year.
I will miss you so much and maybe I will realize how precious you are.
>> I will miss you so much and maybe while I\'m away, I will realize how precious you are.
Although we can\'t meet for a long time, I believe our friendship will be deep.
>> Although we can\'t meet for a long time, I believe our friendship will be stronger.
I\'ll buy your presents. Expect! kkk :)
>> I\'ll buy your presents. Expect that! kkk :)
When I\'m back, make more memories. I love you.
>> When I\'m back, let\'s make more memories. I love you.**You are a very sweet friend!!! :)
Hello there my wonderful student :)
It\'s Monday again. And yes, we have to study again :))
I hope you had a very relaxing weekend meeting your friends last time.
So, let\'s get back to work. :D
As for your homework, all I can say is --- WOW!
You really did a great job in making this letter. It is very meaningful, it has life and it has your heart!
Congratulations!!!! :))
I am very sure that your parents are very proud of you. You are a blessing to your family!
And of course, I\'m sure your friends are lucky to have you around.
I know you are a beautiful person inside out. :))
CORRECTIONS:
Dear my family.
>> Dear my family, **Use a comma for personal letters and a colon for formal and business letters
OR>> To my family,
I will go away for a year so I will miss you very much.
>>CORRECT
OR>> I\'ll be leaving for a year so I will miss you a lot.
Father and mother, Don\'t be sad or lonely although I\'m not here.
>> CORRECT
BETTER>> Father and mother, don\'t be sad or lonely even if I\'m not around.
Maybe, time will go very fast. The day when we meet again will come soon.
>> Maybe, time will go very fast and the day when we meet again will come soon.
OR>> Time flies fast and we will meet again soon.
When I\'m back, I will be a more reliable daughter.
>> CORRECT **I like the adjective you used :)
Don\'t worry about me so much:-)
>> CORRECT
Brother, while I\'m not here, help parents a lot.
>> Brother, while I\'m not here, help our parents a lot.
OR>> Brother, while I\'m not here, help our parents all the time.
Study hard and don\'t get home late.
>> CORRECT
When I\'m back, let\'s go shopping and go to the movies together.
>> CORRECT **Sweet sister :)
OR>> When I got back...
I love you so much.♥
>> CORRECT :))
Or>> You are always in my heart.
Dear my best friends.
>> Dear best friends,
Hey, I\'m so sorry that we can\'t meet for a year.
>> CORRECT :)
OR>> Hey, I\'m so sorry that we won\'t meet for a year.
I will miss you so much and maybe I will realize how precious you are.
>> I will miss you so much and maybe while I\'m away, I will realize how precious you are.
Although we can\'t meet for a long time, I believe our friendship will be deep.
>> Although we can\'t meet for a long time, I believe our friendship will be stronger.
I\'ll buy your presents. Expect! kkk :)
>> I\'ll buy your presents. Expect that! kkk :)
When I\'m back, make more memories. I love you.
>> When I\'m back, let\'s make more memories. I love you.**You are a very sweet friend!!! :)
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