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Hi Paula!!! How are you today? What happened yesterday? Electronic devices that I have are a cell phone, PMP, MP3 and so on. I don't use well MP3 nowadays because a cell phone has this function. A cell phone that released recently has a lot of useful functions. Therefore, if there is a cell phone, other electronic devices don't need anymore. A cell phone necessarily need in our life now. However, it causes a lot of side effects. A cell phone addiction is serious social problem, specially with children. Of course, I also fall into a little addiction. I mainly use a cell phone for internet surfing, brief games and information gathering. Frankly speaking, I am using many time to play games. If I haven't a cell phone for a moment around me, I feel nervous. Obviously, a cell phone is useful device for us, but it is important to use well. We also have to think electromagnetic waves that it gives us. I wish to have our class again with you. Bye

Hi Jehee! ^.^ Happy Tuesday evening! ^^   Wow ~~~ ^^ You have expressed your answer for your homework very clearly. You have used the vocabulary words very well. Most of your sentences are well-constructed. Very good!   However, see the corrections and suggestions below!   Anyway, good job! Keep it up! ^^ I am glad that I heard your voice again. ^.^   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~   Hi Paula!!!>> CORRECT! >> OR: Dear [Name],How are you today?>> CORRECT!What happened yesterday?>> CORRECT! >> OR: What happened to you yesterday?Electronic devices that I have are a cell phone, PMP, MP3 and so on.>> The electronic devices that I have are cellphone, PMP, MP3 and so on.I don\'t use well MP3 nowadays because a cell phone has this function.>> I don\'t use my MP3 well nowadays, because my cellphone has this function. >> OR: I don\'t use my MP3 often nowadays, because my cellphone has this function.A cell phone that released recently has a lot of useful functions.>> There is a cellphone that is released recently that has a lot of useful functions.Therefore, if there is a cell phone, other electronic devices don\'t need anymore.>> Therefore, if there is a cellphone, other devices are not needed anymore. >> OR: Therefore, if I have my cellphone, I don\'t need my other devices anymore.A cell phone necessarily need in our life now.>> Cellphones are really necessarily needed in our lives now.However, it causes a lot of side effects.>> CORRECT!A cell phone addiction is serious social problem, specially with children.>> Cellphone addiction is a serious social problem, specially with children.Of course, I also fall into a little addiction.>> CORRECT!I mainly use a cell phone for internet surfing, brief games and information gathering.>> I mainly use my cellphone for internet surfing, brief games and information gathering.Frankly speaking, I am using many time to play games.>> Frankly speaking, I use it many times or for a long time to play games.If I haven\'t a cell phone for a moment around me, I feel nervous.>> If I don\'t have it around me for a moment, I feel nervous.Obviously, a cell phone is useful device for us, but it is important to use well.>> Obviously, cell phone is a useful device for us, but it is important to use it well.We also have to think electromagnetic waves that it gives us. >> CORRECT!I wish to have our class again with you. >> I wish to have our class again. >> OR: I wish to have my class with you again. Bye >> Bye!