homework :)
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What was your happiest childhood memory?
My happiest childhood memory isn't huge but small.
Even now, my family have times together. But as I and my brother were growing, the time with family is reduced like usual families.
My happiest childhood memory that I remember is when my father bought camcorder.
At that time, my father videoed my family every night to remember those times.
My brother and me drinking chocolate milk with johns on, my mother washing the dishes...
It is my happiest childhood memory that we watched the video and smiled happily.
강사 첨삭
Hello Lisa!
Thank you for opening up your childhood memory with me :)
I know this is very precious for you and I hope you\'ll create more happy memories with your family :)
See you later!
__T. Myra (\")(^^,)
My happiest childhood memory isn\'t huge but small.
>> NOTE: Huge or small is an adjective for sizes my dear
>> My childhood memory is simple.
Even now, my family have times together. But as I and my brother were growing, the time with family is reduced like usual families.
>> We still have family times together but, as me and my brother are growing up, we have lesser time with our family like the others.
My happiest childhood memory that I remember is when my father bought camcorder.
>> CORRECT
At that time, my father videoed my family every night to remember those times.
>> At that time, my father always take a video of my family every night to remember those times.
My brother and me drinking chocolate milk with johns on, my mother washing the dishes...
>> My brother and me drinking chocolate milk with johns on, or even when my mother washes the dishes.
It is my happiest childhood memory that we watched the video and smiled happily.
>> The happiest moment of my childhood years was when we watched our videos and smiled happily.
Thank you for opening up your childhood memory with me :)
I know this is very precious for you and I hope you\'ll create more happy memories with your family :)
See you later!
__T. Myra (\")(^^,)
My happiest childhood memory isn\'t huge but small.
>> NOTE: Huge or small is an adjective for sizes my dear
>> My childhood memory is simple.
Even now, my family have times together. But as I and my brother were growing, the time with family is reduced like usual families.
>> We still have family times together but, as me and my brother are growing up, we have lesser time with our family like the others.
My happiest childhood memory that I remember is when my father bought camcorder.
>> CORRECT
At that time, my father videoed my family every night to remember those times.
>> At that time, my father always take a video of my family every night to remember those times.
My brother and me drinking chocolate milk with johns on, my mother washing the dishes...
>> My brother and me drinking chocolate milk with johns on, or even when my mother washes the dishes.
It is my happiest childhood memory that we watched the video and smiled happily.
>> The happiest moment of my childhood years was when we watched our videos and smiled happily.
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