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2014-08-01 · 첨삭 강사 Myra

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The one of the happiest my childhood memories was the short travel with moy mother to the eastern coast. During our journey, we could have a lot of conversation. It was the great chance to make me understand how she cares about me. After the travel, we could strongly bond with each other. I wish I have another chance to go travel with her again before she gets old.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]! :)

Thank you for sharing your childhood memory with me.
I hope you can create more happy memories with your family!

I know you are a good man inside, and I\'m sure your mom is proud of you!
Have a great night and see you tomorrow. :))

The one of the happiest my childhood memories was the short travel with my mother to the eastern coast.
>> My happiest childhood memory was my trip with my mother to the eastern coast.

 During our journey, we could have a lot of conversation.
>> During our journey, we had a lot of conversation.

It was the great chance to make me understand how she cares about me.
>> It was a great chance for me to understand how much she cares about me.

 After the travel, we could strongly bond with each other.
>> After traveling, our relationship became stronger.

 I wish I have another chance to go travel with her again before she gets old.
>>
I wish I have another chance to travel with her again before she gets old.

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