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Do you think "spam mail" should be outlawed? Why?
I think "spam mail" should be outlawed. Because I think it can spread computer virus and private information. Also i can't sometimes check important mail because of it. When I erase it, I can erase my important mail by mistake. And if my private information is leaked, I am also damaged. I think it is serious problem. Nowdays I receive a lot of spam mail to my phone too. So I think goverment tightens regulations about it.
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Hi there Shelly^^
Thank you so much for sending your response!^^
It is truly bothering to receive spam mail!
It\'s useless sometimes and just takes the space of our emails.
What do you do with your spam mail?
It\'s inconvinient right?
So, like you I also agree that it must be controlled for
the sake of the privacy of people.^^
Take care!^^
t. Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
Do you think \"spam mail\" should be outlawed? Why?
>> CORRECTI think \"spam mail\" should be outlawed.
>> CORRECT
OR> I agree that \"spam mail\" must be outlawed.
Because I think it can spread computer virus and private information.
>> CORRECT
OR> It is sometimes the cause of computer viruses and access to private information.
Also i can\'t sometimes check important mail because of it.
>> Also I sometimes can\'t check important mail because of it.
When I erase it, I can erase my important mail by mistake.
>> CORRECT
OR> If I delete it, I can delete my important mails by mistake.
And if my private information is leaked, I am also damaged.
>> CORRECT
OR> If my private information was leaked, I\'d be in trouble.
I think it is serious problem.
>> I think it is a serious problem.
Nowdays I receive a lot of spam mail to my phone too.
>> Nowdays I receive a lot of spam mail in my phone too.
So I think goverment tightens regulations about it.
>> So I think the should goverment tighten regulations about it.
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