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2014-08-07 · 첨삭 강사 Myra

학생이 쓴 원문

The meaning of "happiness" for me is strongly related to people I care about. I feel happy when I see my relatives pleased with their good things. It seems that their happy mood has infuence on my state. Therefore, I pray that good things always happen for my people. It is the way I become happy.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!
Hope you have a great day today :)
Thanks for doing your homework, I know you\'ve been busy lately.

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__T Myra :)

CORRECTIONS:
The meaning of \"happiness\" for me is strongly related to people I care about.
>>CORRECT
OR>> Happiness for me is about the people I care.

I feel happy when I see my relatives pleased with their good things.
>>CORRECT
>>I feel happy whenever I see my relatives contented with their lives.

It seems that their happy mood has infuence on my state.
>>It seems that their happy mood has an influence on me.
OR>>Whenever they are happy, I feel the same way too.

Therefore, I pray that good things always happen for my people.
>>Therefore, I pray that good things will always happen to them.

It is the way I become happy.
>>This way, I can be happy.

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