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2014-08-08 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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1. ESSAY: If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose? : Now, I am doing it. My major was piano at university. So, I couldn't learn about english much. Because, I had no time, then. However, I'm so happy. Nowadays, I can study english as much as I want to do. Especially, I like reading english books. 2. ESSAY: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. I agree. All of the private businesses must do it. It is important for private company to be profit making. But It is significant for public establishments and medical institutions to be non profit making. Enforced education is the same. The government must exist for the public welfare. I believe that is the national power. So politics must clean. That's the point

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Happy Friday, Ms. [Name]^^ I really had fun reading your homework! Well done! Thanks for doing your best to express your opinion~ However, take note of your capitalization and punctuation marks. *_* They play a very important role in composing paragraphs. 1. ESSAY: If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose?: Now, I am doing it. >>Now, I am diong it. >>I am currently studying English.My major was piano at university. >>My major was Piano Studies. >>I majored in Piano Studies. So, I couldn\'t learn about english much. >>So, I couldn\'t learn about English much.  Because, I had no time, then. >>I couldn\'t learn about English much  because I had no time then. However, I\'m so happy. >>CORRECT!Nowadays, I can study english as much as I want to do. >>Nowadays, I can study English as much as I want to. Especially, I like reading english books. >>Especially, I like reading English books. 2. ESSAY: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit.I agree. All of the private businesses must do it. >>CORRECT!It is important for private company to be profit making. >>It is important for private companies to profit making. But It is significant for public establishments and medical institutions to be non profit making. >>But it is significant for public establishments and medical institutions to be non profit. Enforced education is the same. >>CORRECT!The government must exist for the public welfare. >>CORRECT!I believe that is the national power. >>CORRECT!So politics must clean. >>So,politics must be clean. >>Therefore, politics must be transparent.  That\'s the point >>That\'s the point.

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