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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: How can we persuade people to make healthy lifestyle choices like not smoking, exercising and keeping a correct BMI (Body Mass Index)?
Nowadays, people want to live easily.
So, they eat some fast food and they don't like exercising.
However, if they live without exercise and eat fast food, they become gradually fat.
It causes adult disease in the long run.
Therefore, we ought to make healthy lifestyle choices.
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There are ways to encourage and persuade people to take care better of their health.
Sometimes it is really hard to do it if the people are not willing to do them for their own good.
On a second thought, I would stick to the tried and tested methods of making people stop.
Have a good night dear!
Take a deep sleep because you need it.
-Teacher Chloe
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: How can we persuade people to make healthy lifestyle choices like not smoking, exercising and keeping a correct BMI (Body Mass Index)?Nowadays, people want to live easily.
>>Correct!So, they eat some fast food and they don\'t like exercising.
>>Correct!However, if they live without exercise and eat fast food, they become gradually fat.>>However, continuously consumption fast food and without exercise they will become gradually fat.It causes adult disease in the long run.>>It causes a lot of diseases in the long run.Therefore, we ought to make healthy lifestyle choices.
>>Therefore, we must have a healthy lifestyle choices.
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