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If your going to put up a business, what kind of business would that be? Give details regarding the business that you would like to have.
Answer in 3 sentences only.
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If I have a chance to put up a business, I'd like to do business related with kids such as kids cafe, trampolin room and recreation room etc.
I can treat kids very well and make friends with them within short time because
I can read and catch their mind and thinking easily.
It makes me happy just to think about it. :-)
강사 첨삭
Hello Mr. [Name]!
Happy Thursday to you. :))
You\'ll have a long vacation, so I hope you enjoy it.
But, do not forget what you learned this week okay? :))
Keep safe!!! ^^
Your sunsengnim,
_T.Myra (\")(^^)
CORRECTIONS:
If I have a chance to put up a business, I\'d like to do business related with kids such as kids cafe, trampolin room and recreation room etc.
>>If I have a chance to put up a business, I\'d like to do business related with kids such as kids cafe, trampoline room and recreation room.
I can treat kids very well and make friends with them within short time because I can read and catch their mind and thinking easily.
>> I can treat kids very well and make friends with them within a short period of time because I can read and catch their mind easily.
It makes me happy just to think about it. :-)
>>CORRECT
OR>> Thinking about it gives me happiness.
Happy Thursday to you. :))
You\'ll have a long vacation, so I hope you enjoy it.
But, do not forget what you learned this week okay? :))
Keep safe!!! ^^
Your sunsengnim,
_T.Myra (\")(^^)
CORRECTIONS:
If I have a chance to put up a business, I\'d like to do business related with kids such as kids cafe, trampolin room and recreation room etc.
>>If I have a chance to put up a business, I\'d like to do business related with kids such as kids cafe, trampoline room and recreation room.
I can treat kids very well and make friends with them within short time because I can read and catch their mind and thinking easily.
>> I can treat kids very well and make friends with them within a short period of time because I can read and catch their mind easily.
It makes me happy just to think about it. :-)
>>CORRECT
OR>> Thinking about it gives me happiness.
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