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2014-08-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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Subject : Would you break the law to save a loved one? I will break the law if my lover is in crisis. Frankly, i can't belive the law. Sometimes, the law is deceive victims and protect suspect's right. Also a accident was done, nothing can be done. That time, i alredy lost my lover. The suspect don't receive punishment from the raw. Moreover, when i want to revenge to suspect, the raw hider me rather than help. I think only i am the one who can save my love one.

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Hi there, Ms. [이름]! Thank you for your composition! I think you really give your all when you love someone. How lucky that person is whom you love. However, remember to love yourself more because you can never truly love someone else without learning to value your own self. Take care and have a nice day! T. JanE ^^ Subject : Would you break the law to save a loved one? >> Correct I will break the law if my lover is in crisis.>> Correct Frankly, i can\'t belive the law.>> Frankly, I can\'t believe the law. Sometimes, the law is deceive victims and protect suspect\'s right.>> Sometimes, the law deceives victims and protects the suspect\'s rights.  Also a accident was done, nothing can be done. >> Also, when an accident was done, nothing more could be done.  That time, i alredy lost my lover.>> That time, I already lost my lover. The suspect don\'t receive punishment from the raw.>> The suspect doesn\'t receive punishment from the law. Moreover, when i want to revenge to suspect, the raw hider me rather than help.>> Moreover, when I want to take revenge to the suspect, the law keeps me from doing so. I think only i am the one who can save my love one. >> I think I am the only one who can save my loved one.   

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