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Do you think that kids should get rewarded for getting good grades?
I think kids have to get reward If they studied hard even though they didn't get good grades. Even if they tried to study hard for getting good grades, but they may not get those. In that case, If someone scolds them, I think, they never study again. Getting good grades is not everything. An effort is more important than getting them. So we have to tell "Good job, but you can get better grads next time if you study harder." to kids who made an effort but didn't get grade. Also, we give reward to kids who get good grades. And to conclude, every kids making an effort are qualified to get reward.
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Hi there Shelly!^^
Thank you for sending me your homework!^^
How was your weekend?
I hope that your holiday went well.
I do agree that it\'s not always about the grades.
Not everybody is good with Math or Science or English but still they try their best in their classes.
A reward may not just be a material thing but a good pat on the back or good words can make
things better!^^
Thank you Shelly!^^
Have a great day!^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
I think kids have to get reward If they studied hard even though they didn\'t get good grades.
>> I think kids have to get a reward if they studied hard even though they didn\'t get good grades. Even if they tried to study hard for getting good grades, but they may not get those.
>> CORRECT
OR> Even if they tried to study really hard to get good grades, but they may not get good ones. In that case, If someone scolds them, I think, they never study again.
>> In that case, If someone scolds them, I think, they will never study again. Getting good grades is not everything.
>> CORRECT
OR> It\'s not always about getting good grades.An effort is more important than getting them.
>> CORRECT
OR> Making effort counts.So we have to tell \"Good job, but you can get better grads next time if you study harder.\" to kids who made an effort but didn\'t get grade.
>> So we have to tell them \"Good job, but you can get better grades next time if you study harder.\" to kids who made an effort but didn\'t get good grades. Also, we give reward to kids who get good grades.
>> Also, we give a reward to kids who get good grades. And to conclude, every kids making an effort are qualified to get reward.
>> And to conclude, every kid making an effort is qualified to get a reward.
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