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2014-08-27 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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What religion do most Koreans practice in your country? Most people think that the most Koreans are Buddhism because it was our tranditional religion. However, the statistic shows that the most Koreans are Christian. They belive in God and Jesus Christ. I am also Chritian. I go to the church every suday and pray to God. However, only the 35 percents of Koreans who belive in God. There are so many who doesn't have religion.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Wow, you did all your homework. I think you have a lot of spare time.

Anyway, please go over my corrections.

~KeLLy~

What religion do most Koreans practice in your country?
Most people think that the most Koreans are Buddhism because it was our tranditional religion.
>> Most people think that the most Koreans are Buddhists because it was our traditional religion.

However, the statistic shows that the most Koreans are Christian.
>> However, statistic shows that most Koreans are Christians.

They belive in God and Jesus Christ.

>> They believe in God and Jesus Christ.

I am also Chritian.

>> I am also a Christian.

I go to the church every suday and pray to God.

>> I go to the church every Sunday and pray to God.

However, only the 35 percents of Koreans who belive in God.

>> However, only 35 percent of Koreans believe in God.

There are so many who doesn\'t have religion.

>> There are many Koreans who don\'t have a religion.

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