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Do you have a credit card? In what ways are credit cards better than cash?
I have a credit card. There are many benefit when we use a credit card. Firstly, we don't have to carry changes. If we have a lot of coins, the wallet will be heavy. The heavy wallet is annoying. Secondly, we can save our time. If we use credit card, we don't need to waste our time while paying. If we use cash, we have to count money to give casher. And the casher count again and give us changes. Then, we have to count again to make sure changes are correct. However, when we use a credit card, we only have to do is check the amount of money and sign on the paper. We can save many steps than using cash. Lastly, we can pay it eventhough we don't have money right now. We give real money to credit card company a month later. So, even if we don't have money right now, we can buy some food.
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Do you have a credit card? In what ways are credit cards better than cash?I have a credit card.
>> Correct.
There are many benefit when we use a credit card.
>> There are many benefits that we can from using credit card.
Firstly, we don\'t have to carry changes.
>> Firstly, we don\'t have to carry cash.
If we have a lot of coins, the wallet will be heavy.
>> If we have a lot of coins, it will be heavy in your wallet.
The heavy wallet is annoying.
>> Correct.
Secondly, we can save our time.
>> Correct.
If we use credit card, we don\'t need to waste our time while paying.
>> If we use a credit card, we don\'t need to waste our time when paying.
If we use cash, we have to count money to give casher.
>> If we use cash, we have to count our money before giving it to a cashier.
And the casher count again and give us changes.
>> And the cashier will count it again and give our change.
Then, we have to count again to make sure changes are correct.
>> Then, we have to count it again to make sure change is correct.
However, when we use a credit card, we only have to do is check the amount of money and sign on the paper.
>> However, when we use a credit card, all we have to do is check our total amount of purchase and sign the paper.
We can save many steps than using cash.
>> We can save a lot of time
Lastly, we can pay it eventhough we don\'t have money right now.
>> Lastly, we can pay it even though we don\'t have money.
We give real money to credit card company a month later.
>> We will just the credit card company a month later.
So, even if we don\'t have money right now, we can buy some food.
>> So, even if we don\'t have money, we can buy some food.
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