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2014-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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Is your baby Okay? I had a online class with your collegue, Abby. Her comment was very impressive so it will be help to me. I want to tell her 'Thank you'. Today's class was last to me because my husband want to exercise with me in the morning. Therefore I'd like to skip it several months. Fall is good seson for walking and running. Take care. Thank you. At what age do you think should someone be allowed to have a mobile phone? In Korea, first grader in elemetary school have a mobile phone. They buy it for their children. This is because they want to get in touch with their child. I understand that they are busy so they can care of them with mobile phone. Actually it is very useful. However, don't they have a other way? I worried about electromagnatic waves. I will be influenced to brain. Also there is notice service in the School. On the other hand, if students have not mobile phone, they feel left out from friends. I think it is good from six grade but I want to delay it more.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, my dear Anne!   My baby is a lot better now. Unlike yesterday, she is at least smiling and giggling now.   It is good to hear that you were impressed by Teacher Abby. Make use of the things that you\'ve learned from all the teachers you\'ve had in Power English, okay? And I hope to hear from you again. I\'ll be missing you!   ~Teacher Shanee   Is your baby Okay? >>> Correct! (okay) I had a online class with your collegue, Abby. >>> Correct! Her comment was very impressive so it will be help to me. >>> Her comment was very impressive so it will be helpful to me. I want to tell her \'Thank you\'. >>> Correct! Today\'s class was last to me because my husband want to exercise with me in the morning. >>> Today\'s class is my last day of studying English because my husband wants me to exercise in the morning. Therefore I\'d like to skip it several months. >>> Therefore, I\'d like to skip studying for several months. Fall is good seson for walking and running. >>> Fall is a good season for walking and running. Take care. >>> Correct! Thank you. >>> Correct!At what age do you think should someone be allowed to have a mobile phone?In Korea, first grader in elemetary school have a mobile phone. >>> In Korea, first graders in elementary schools have a mobile phone. >>> OR: In Korea, first grade elementary students already have a mobile phone. They buy it for their children. >>> Parents buy phones for their children. This is because they want to get in touch with their child. >>> Correct! I understand that they are busy so they can care of them with mobile phone. >>> I understand that they are busy so they can talk to their children and give advice through mobile phones. Actually it is very useful. >>> Correct!>>> OR: Actually this device is very useful. However, don\'t they have a other way? >>> However, don\'t they have another way? >>> OR: However, don\'t they have other ways? I worried about electromagnatic waves. >>> I worried about the electromagnetic waves. I will be influenced to brain. >>> It can affect the brain. Also there is notice service in the School. >>> Also, there is a service notice in school.  On the other hand, if students have not mobile phone, they feel left out from friends. >>> On the other hand, if students have no mobile phone, they feel left out by their friends. I think it is good from six grade but I want to delay it more. >>> I think mobile phones are good for sixth graders but I want to delay it more.

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