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2014-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

I think the most important quality is kindness. People with this quality are favored in everyday life. So sons and daughters with this quality can build good realtionship with others. Eventually that will lead to more effective cooperation. Also people put importance on kindness. Parents teach their children to have kindness. So that's why I feel this way.

강사 첨삭

Oh, hi there! How are you today, Adam? I can hear Christmas carols here in the Philippines. You know, Filipinos prepare for Christmas for a long time~ Anyways, I always admire your composition; however, try to avoid using the same words repetitively. Remember, we are enriching your vocabulary skill as well^^ Have a great Tuesday! I think the most important quality is kindness. >>CORRECT!People with this quality are favored in everyday life. >>CORRECT!  So sons and daughters with this quality can build good realtionship with others. >>CORRECT! Eventually that will lead to more effective cooperation. >>Eventually that will lead to a more effective cooperation.Also people put importance on kindness. >>Also people put importance on this trait. Parents teach their children to have kindness. >>Parent teach their children to have that significant attitude. So that\'s why I feel this way. >> So that\'s why I feel that way.  

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