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On the other hand, children’s schedules are busy as much as parents. The highest completion makes children study more to get a good grade or to get a job than in the past. After school, they go to two or three private institutions to support class. When they are back to a house, they have to do homework to catch up until night. Most of their week time is about studying and weekends they hang out with their friends.
In conclusion, modern lifestyle brings the change of people lifestyle and it leads less time with their children.
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On the other hand, children’s schedules are busy as much as parents.
>>On the other hand, children\'s schedules are busy as much as their parents.
The highest completion makes children study more to get a good grade or to get a job than in the past.
>>CORRECT
After school, they go to two or three private institutions to support class.
>>After school, they go to two or three private institutions to support their classes.
When they are back to a house, they have to do homework to catch up until night.
>>When they are back to their house, they have to do homework to catch up until late night.
Most of their week time is about studying and weekends they hang out with their friends.
>>They spend most of their weekdays studying and on weekends they hang out with their friends.
In conclusion, modern lifestyle brings the change of people lifestyle and it leads less time with their children.
>>In conclusion, modern lifestyle brings changes to people\'s lifestyles and it leads to lesser time with their children.
On the other hand, children’s schedules are busy as much as parents.
>>On the other hand, children\'s schedules are busy as much as their parents.
The highest completion makes children study more to get a good grade or to get a job than in the past.
>>CORRECT
After school, they go to two or three private institutions to support class.
>>After school, they go to two or three private institutions to support their classes.
When they are back to a house, they have to do homework to catch up until night.
>>When they are back to their house, they have to do homework to catch up until late night.
Most of their week time is about studying and weekends they hang out with their friends.
>>They spend most of their weekdays studying and on weekends they hang out with their friends.
In conclusion, modern lifestyle brings the change of people lifestyle and it leads less time with their children.
>>In conclusion, modern lifestyle brings changes to people\'s lifestyles and it leads to lesser time with their children.
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