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2014-09-03 · 첨삭 강사 Myra

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Change Intro, People’s lifestyles have improved and the way parents take care of their children has changed, too. In my opinion, parents today do not pay as much attention to their children as parents did in the past. ---- If you will change one thing in your life, what would it be and why? Answer in 3-5 sentences That's very a interesting question to me. If I have a choice to change in my life,I put more effortsin time-management of my college periods. Because at that time I just hang out with my friends and I didn't study hard. If I managed time well, I will have a more choice than now.

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Hello there Serena!
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Thanks for doing your homework today.
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Teacher Myra
CORRECTIONS:
If you will change one thing in your life, what would it be and why?
Answer in 3-5 sentences
That\'s very a interesting question to me.
>>That\'s a very interesting question.
If I have a choice to change in my life,I put more effortsin time-management of my college periods.
>>If I have a choice to change in my life, I want to put more effort in time-management during my college years.
Because at that time I just hang out with my friends and I didn\'t study hard.
>>CORRECT
If I managed time well, I will have a more choice than now.
>>If I managed time well, I will have more choices than now.

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