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Some people say those're important to do outdoor activities and volunteer for poor people than to take classes for being a good university' student. I agree with it a little. Getting experiences through outdoor activities and volunteering is better than knowledges through just only reading books and taking lectures. However, that time is to study hard to university students. And it's too short. If they do not study hard through their professor's classes, they don't get chances to learn anymore as that time goes by. In my case, I got my recent job at 23 years old. After that, I worked and studied at the same time. So I finally got a scolarship. But, I couldn't take classes a lot during the university student's season. So I'm regretful a little as a university student. If I can go back to that time, I will take classes with my university's classmates.

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