homework
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Composition Writing: Imagine you had a hundred dollars, but you couldn't keep it. You had to give it away to a person or charity. Who would you give it to? What would you want them to do with it?
One day If I got a hundred dollars, I will be very happy to use for me. I can buy new clothes or shoes which will statisfy me. But, actually I only can buy my stuff that it doesn't matter I have it or not. However, if I use it for someone else, it will be more happy and it can satisfy many people. Also, It will be very essential for them.
If I have to give it away to person or charity, I will donate money to children who live in developing country. There are many poor children who are dying these moment because they don't have any things to eat or clean water to drink. So, with a hundred dollars, I hope they could eat clean food or water. It will be better they can go school and study.
p.s I can not find today's homework.
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Fantastic job [이름]! ^^
Your homework is well thought out and the corrections I have made edited some sentences so that it will sound better though it still means the same. Your composition is well writtten, no worries, just some kinks on the vocabulary.
Keep up the wonderful job [이름]. ^^
Also, thank you for pointing out the homework for Friday. ^^ It\'s there now, don\'t worry. ^^
Have a great day!
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==
If I have to give it away to person or charity, I will donate money to children who live in developing country. There are many poor children who are dying these moment because they don\'t have any things to eat or clean water to drink. So, with a hundred dollars, I hope they could eat clean food or water. It will be better they can go school and study.
If I had a hundred dollars, I would be very happy to use it for myself. I would buy new clothes or shoes for my satisfaction but then, I would be buying stuff that would not matter if I had it or not. However, if I use the money on someone else\'s needs, I will be happier and the money would satisfy them as well as fulfill their needs or essentials.
If I have to give the money away to a person or a charity, I will donate the money to children who live in developing countries since most of them don\'t have enough food to eat nor clean water to drink. So with the hundred dollars, I hope it would provide some food and water to these children. It would be better too if they can go to school and study.
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