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2014-09-24 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Since Mr. [Name] has taken over 'Manchester city' which of the premier league football team in England, he is a well known rich in Korea. Moreover, Man City won the Premier League cup title. It makes him more famouse. We say that he was born with biting a gold spoon. He is one of the luckiest guy in the world. If I could use his identity, I would donate a big money to charity and make a shelter for the homeless. I admire his money, but I do not respect him. And, I have one more wish. If possible, I hope to be born Jung Woosung in my next life. I do not care, even if I would be a homeless and a begger in my next life. I could enjoy that all women would be totally enraptured by my attraction. Even I jealous him. But, all women thank God. And, they get healing as watching him. The pope is a great person. I like his character and respect his mind and behavior. So, I would have Mansour's money, Jungwoosung's appearance & the pope's mind. It would be the most perfect guy in the woruld.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon Mr. [이름]!

Well, what a combination!

Mansour\'s wealth, Jung Woosung\'s appearance, and the Pope\'s intelligence.
You would really be the most perfect man in the world.

Where on earth did you get that idea Mr. [이름]? hahaha

And for you information, I have a crush on Jung Woo sung. Oh my GODDDD!!!

He is one of the actors whom I like very much. kkk

Anyway, having that kind of dream in not bad at all. So keep on dreaming then! ;)

See you tomorrow!

Always,

Kathrine ^^


Since Mr. [Name] has taken over \'Manchester city\' which of the premier league football team in England, he is a well known rich in Korea.

>>  Since Mr. [Name] has taken over \'Manchester city\' which of the premier league football team in England, he is a well known rich man  in Korea.
 Moreover, Man City won the Premier League cup title.

>>  correct!

It makes him more famouse.

>>  correct! (famous)

>> or; It made him more famous.
 We say that he was born with biting a gold spoon.

>>  We say that he was born with a golden spoon in his mouth.

He is one of the luckiest guy in the world.

>>  correct!

 If I could use his identity, I would donate a big money to charity and make a shelter for the homeless.

>>  correct!

>> or: If I could use his identity, I would donate a huge amount of money to the charity and I would make shelter for the homeless.

I admire his money, but I do not respect him.

>>  correct!
 And, I have one more wish.

>>  correct!
 If possible, I hope to be born Jung Woosung in my next life. 

>>  If possible, I hope that I would be born as Jung Woosung in my next life.
 I do not care, even if I would be a homeless and a begger in my next life.

>>  I do not care even if I would be homeless or a beggar in my next life.

I could enjoy that all women would be totally enraptured by my attraction.

>>  I could enjoy all the women I want and they would be allured to me since I am attractive.
 Even I jealous him.

>>  I am even jealous of him.

But, all women thank God.

>>  correct!

And, they get healing as watching him.

>>  And they could even be healed by just watching him.
 The pope is a great person.

>>   correct!

 I like his character and respect his mind and behavior.

>>  I like his character and I respect his mind and behavior.
 So, I would have Mansour\'s money, Jungwoosung\'s appearance & the pope\'s mind.

>>  correct!
 It would be the most perfect guy in the woruld.

>>  I would be the most perfect guy in the world.

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