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Hi [이름]! ^.^

Happy Friday! ^^

I got your point clearly.

However, we may say their actions are a little bit disturbing, but it is how they do business.

There are a lot of people who are really interested in other people\'s lives, especially celebrities.

It is still a good thing, because not all media are doing this.

Other media still consider focusing on social issues and welfare of people.

By the way, you did a good composition.

Just, be careful with your spellings.

Anyway, please see the corrections and suggestions below for more writing improvement.

See you in our class! ^^

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

I disagree that mess media pay too much attention to the famous people\'s personal life.
>> I agree that mass media pay too much attention to famous people\'s personal lives. I disagree with what they are doing.
To attract a large crowd, Mess media writes an article piquantly.
>> To attract a large crown, mass media write articles piquantly.

Some of articles are even not true, they are rather to make a rumor competitively.
>> Some of the articles are not even true. They rather make rumors competitively.

The public does not want to have the useless imforations from mess midia.
>> The public doesn\'t want to have useless information from mass  media.

The famous people also have a right to be protected privacy.
>> Famous people also have the right to privacy.

Today\'s mess midia must stop the extra attention.

>> Today\'s mass media must stop the extra attention they are giving to famous people.