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2014-09-29 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Essay: How much time do you spend with your family? What do you like to do together as a family? I try to spend a lot of time with my family, but it is hard to spend a lot of time with them. Since every member of our family is so busy, it is hard to get along with everyone. We try to have family time on weekend. We gathered up and eat delicious dinner. I like talking with my family. We try to share our problems and find out soultion all together. On speacial weekend, we go to theater to watch movie. Our family loves watching movies so if we are not available to go theater, we watches movie at the house.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!!!

Thank you for answering this essay. Thank you also for sharing your family\'s favorite activity. Enjoy wonderful moments with them.

Essay: How much time do you spend with your family? What do you like to do together as a family?
I try to spend a lot of time with my family, but it is hard to spend a lot of time with them. 

~Kelly^^

>> Correct.

>> or: I try to spend a lot of time with my family, but it is hard.

Since every member of our family is so busy, it is hard to get along with everyone.

>> Correct.

We try to have family time on weekend.

>> We try to have a family time on weekend.

We gathered up and eat delicious dinner.

>> We gathered up and had a delicious dinner.

I like talking with my family.

>> Correct.

We try to share our problems and find out soultion all together.

>> We try to share our problems and find a solution all together.

On speacial weekend, we go to theater to watch movie.

>> On special weekends, we go to the theater to see a movie.

Our family loves watching movies so if we are not available to go theater, we watches movie at the house.

>> Our family loves watching movies so if we are not available to go to the theater, we watch movie at home.

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