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my best party is university Graduate Exhibition.
my univ major is fashion design.
and fashion design major graduate exhibition inserted fashion show always.
I was my graduate exhibition director.
therefore i was experienced my first runway show.
that experience is very specially for me.
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my best party is university Graduate Exhibition.
>>The best party, I\'ve attended was when we had a graduation exhibition in our university.my univ major is fashion design.
>>My major was fashion design.and fashion design major graduate exhibition inserted fashion show always.
>>We always have fashion shows.
I was my graduate exhibition director.
>>I was the exhibition director during that time.therefore i was experienced my first runway show.
>>That\'s why, I experienced my first runway show.that experience is very specially for me.
>>That experience is very specially for me.
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