Homework!

2014-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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I'd like to move my job and residence. I have been used to be tired of eveything. I like to change to be refreshed. Also, to change job, house or community is a great way to make nice experiences. Especially, to live some other place with doing favorite job is alway my dream since I was young. Someday, I will live that kind of life!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^.^

Happy Wednesday! ^^

 

In my case, I prefer to spend my entire life in one place.

It is very convenient.

In addition, I can also save a lot of money.

However, it is really costly to buy a house that you can consider yours.

Even though that\'s the case, I am still trying my best to earn and save money to buy a good house for my family, specially for my parents.

 

By the way, let\'s talk about your composition now.

You presented your answer very well.

Your ideas are well-delivered through your writing.

However, you just missed to check few errors.

They are proper usage of prepositions and con[이름]ctions.

One more thing, be careful of the spelling of the words you use.

That\'s all.

As a whole, you really did great in doing your homework! ^^

Keep on improving! ^^

 

Anyway, see you very soon! ^^

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

 

I\'d like to move my job and residence.

>> I\'d like to move to another job and residence.

I have been used to be tired of eveything.

>> I have been used to be tired of everything.

>> BETTER: I\'m fed up of being tired of everything.

I like to change to be refreshed.

>> CORRECT!

Also, to change job, house or community is a great way to make nice experiences.

>> In addition, to change job, house or community is a great way to make nice experiences.

>> OR: In addition, to change job, house or community is a great way to make some new and nice experiences.

Especially, to live some other place with doing favorite job is alway my dream since I was young.

>> Especially, to live in another place where I can do my favorite job is always my dream since I was young.

>> OR: Especially, to live in another place where I can do my favorite job is always my dream since I was young.

Someday, I will live that kind of life!

>> CORRECT!

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