Homework 5
학생이 쓴 원문
I think professionalism is important in the workplace.
Because if I have a professionalism about education, I will treat my students more appropriately.
And professionalism makes me more confident.
When I discuss many things about education of elementary school students, I can talk things more and more.
So, if I become a teacher, I will study educational things to have a professionalism.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ku [이름], beautiful day! Thank you for answering the question. I am always glad to hear your honest in writing your opinion on any given topic. Keep up the good work. That is right. We must be professional in everything we do especially at work. We will talk more in class. I will see you. Stay warm!~T. Lyn
I think professionalism is important in the workplace.
>>Correct. or I believe professionalism is important in the workplace.
Because if I have a professionalism about education, I will treat my students more appropriately.
Because if I have a professionalism about education, I will treat my students more appropriately.
>>It is because if I have expertise in education, I will treat my students more appropriately.
And professionalism makes me more confident.
And professionalism makes me more confident.
>>Being professional makes me more confident.
When I discuss many things about education of elementary school students, I can talk things more and more.
When I discuss many things about education of elementary school students, I can talk things more and more.
>>The more we talk about elementary school education, the more I have the knowledge to talk about it.
So, if I become a teacher, I will study educational things to have a professionalism.
So, if I become a teacher, I will study educational things to have a professionalism.
>>So, if I become a teacher, I will study more about educational related things to gain more expertise.
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