Homework 5 / 14 / FRI

2021-05-19 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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HOMEWORK: What\'s the best sound in the world for you? There are two sounds that I love the most in the world. First, the white noise, especially the water sound. I don\'t know why I love water sound. But I can still guess why I love water sound. According to my father, I loved staying in a place near any water. Mabe, I love water just naturally. I thought once more why I love the water sound so much. First of all, water sounds definitely make me calm down. Next, a second sound that I like the most. It is night city sound. When I listen to the night city sound, I feel like I\'m achieving my goal. Yep. BYE!!

강사 첨삭

Hello Claire!

Thanks for the wonderful composition. I love the sound of water too. See you tomorrow! ^^

~~Teacher Kate

There are two sounds that I love the most in the world.

>>CORRECT!
First, the white noise, especially the water sound.

>>First, I like the white noise, especially the water sound.
I don\'t know why I love water sound.

>>CORRECT!
But I can still guess why I love water sound.

>>But I can guess why I love water sound.
According to my father, I loved staying in a place near any water.

>>According to my father, I loved staying in places near any body of water.
Mabe, I love water just naturally.

>>Maybe, I just instinctively love water.
I thought once more why I love the water sound so much.

>>CORRECT!
First of all, water sounds definitely make me calm down.

>>CORRECT!
Next, a second sound that I like the most. It is night city sound.

>>The second sound I like is the city\'s night sound.
When I listen to the night city sound, I feel like I\'m achieving my goal.

>>When I listen to the city\'s night sounds, I feel like I\'m achieving my goal.

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