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2021-05-22 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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HOMEWORK: When is a time you forgave someone or were forgiven for something? There were many things to forgave and be forgiven and there will be. One day I knew that my friends were gossiping about me. I had two best friends and those two can meet each other more than I do. Because the location of their academy was close to each of them. But the point is one of my best friend gossiped me to my another best friend. We ended up with this problem by them to apologize to me. Unfortunately, right now, our relationship is not that good. This was the time that I forgave people. Next, I will tell you about the time that I had to apologize to others. Today, I accidentally hit my friend\'s shoulder. But I didn\'t recognize that I hit my friend. Because that place was too crowded. She got a bruise on her hand. I apologized but I think it is unfair. She isn\'t that good girl in subjective opinion. I didn\'t even hit her that strongly. But it can be true. So I apologized.

강사 첨삭

Another great composition Claire!
Keep up the great work and have a fun weekend with your family and cat.
~~Teacher Kate

There were many things to forgave and be forgiven and there will be.
>>There are many things to forgive and be forgiven for and there will be more.
One day I knew that my friends were gossiping about me.
>>CORRECT!
I had two best friends and those two can meet each other more than I do.
>>CORRECT!
Because the location of their academy was close to each of them.
>>It\'s because the location of their academies are close to each other.
But the point is one of my best friend gossiped me to my another best friend.
>>But the point is, one of my best friends gossiped about me to my other best friend.
We ended up with this problem by them to apologize to me.
>>We ended up with this problem by they ended up apologizing to me.
Unfortunately, right now, our relationship is not that good.
>>CORRECT!
This was the time that I forgave people.
>>CORRECT!
Next, I will tell you about the time that I had to apologize to others.
>>CORRECT!
Today, I accidentally hit my friend\'s shoulder.
>>CORRECT!
But I didn\'t recognize that I hit my friend.
>>But I didn\'t notice that I hit my friend.
Because that place was too crowded.
>>It\'s Because that place was too crowded.
She got a bruise on her hand.
>>CORRECT!
I apologized but I think it is unfair.
>>CORRECT!
She isn\'t that good girl in subjective opinion.
>>She isn\'t that good a girl in my subjective opinion.
I didn\'t even hit her that strongly.
>>CORRECT!
But it can be true. So I apologized.
>>But it might be true so I apologized.

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