Homework 5/23 (2/2)
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello Allen!
This is the last part.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
To tackle the problems illustrated above, it seems urgent for us to take some measures in practical terms.
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First of all, government should enforce their rules to protect nature such as limiting gas emission from factories and machines.
>> First of all, the government should enforce its rules to protect nature such as limiting gas emission from factories and machines.
Secondly, scientists and professionals should research and invent reusable and pollution-free energy.
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Lastly, individuals that have big responsibility and play a important role should save energy, take public transportations and any more.
>> Lastly, individuals that have a big responsibility and play an important role should save energy, like public transportations and many more.
This is a basic approach but the most important solution.
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As outlined above, the problems are too big to disregard, because destroyed nature can continuously make other problems that have negative effects on people.
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My suggestions included enforcing policy, researching technology and saving energy.
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It is my prediction that if we make an effort continuously, then the vicious circle will be broken out.
>> It is my prediction that if we make a consistent effort, then we could break this vicious cycle.
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