homework(5/31) : gifts thai i want to receive from everyone in our family.

2016-06-01 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Dear sam. There was a unexpected errors on system, so it took 4 hours to solve the problem, but now it was completely successful. Thank you for your compliment today. I will keep in mind that continueing to be talkative in our class help me to be successful in speaking the language well. Best Regards. = body = I used to write at memo in my phone whenever a idea suddenly crossed my mind. They are a list of gifts that i want to receive someone at my birthday or wedding anniversary or a special day. haha I have just opened my memo in the phone. There are only two lists at that memo as follow: A collection of classical guitar repertory and touch pen for mobile phone. Those are not expensive so much, nevertheless I want to receive from my children. The lists are necessary for playing the guitar, for small keyboard size, respectively. It is simple, isn't it? But, The gifts that I want to receive from everyone in my family are their happiness and health above all things.

강사 첨삭

Hello Oh,

Man often becomes what he believes himself to be. If I keep on saying to myself that I cannot do a certain thing, it is possible that I may end by really becoming incapable of doing it. 

T. Jeny

 

Dear sam.

>>correct

There was a unexpected errors on system, so it took 4 hours to solve the problem, but now it was completely successful.

>>There was an unexpected error on the system, so it took 4 hours to solve the problem, but now it was completed successfully.

Thank you for your compliment today.

>>correct
I will keep in mind that continueing to be talkative in our class help me to be successful in speaking the language well.
>>I will keep in mind that  I need to be talkative in our class which will help me to be successful in speaking the language well.

Best Regards.
>>correct
= body =
I used to write at memo in my phone whenever a idea suddenly crossed my mind.

>>I used to write at memo on my phone whenever a sudden idea cross my mind.
They are a list of gifts that i want to receive someone at my birthday or wedding anniversary or a special day. haha

>>They are a list of gifts that I want to receive from someone on my birthday, wedding anniversary or on special days. haha
I have just opened my memo in the phone.

>>I have just opened my memo on the phone.
There are only two lists at that memo as follow: A collection of classical guitar repertory and touch pen for mobile phone.

>>There are two lists on my memo which are as follows: A collection of classical guitar repertory and a touch pen for my mobile phone.
Those are not expensive so much, nevertheless I want to receive from my children.

>>Those are not not that expensive, nevertheless I want to receive those from my children.

The lists are necessary for playing the guitar, for small keyboard size, respectively.

>>The lists are necessary for playing the guitar and for a small sized keyboard respectively.
It is simple, isn\'t it?

>>correct
But, The gifts that I want to receive from everyone in my family are their happiness and health above all things.

>>But, the gifts that I wanted to receive from everyone in my family are their happiness and good health above all things.

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