Homework #5
학생이 쓴 원문
Q. Describe your ideal town or city, why you would want to live there, and what you would do there.
I should consider many things to decide the residence, and I think ideal town or city has the necessary conditions such as safe, clean, convenient and so on.
Because I live alone, so I think that the safe is one of the important things when I choose the residence.
Also I have not a car and I would like to go out somewhere, therefore the town or city should be convenient for transportation.
Finally, these days I have started to think about health, in other words, well-being.
So I would like to go to nature (or eco) friendly place, too.
강사 첨삭
Happy Friday Kate,
Thank you for answering my call today. Please take a rest and try to relax your mind.
Don\'t think too much of your work nor your future. Just enjoy what life throws at you for now.
Q. Describe your ideal town or city, why you would want to live there, and what you would do there.
I should consider many things to decide the residence,
>> CORRECT
and I think ideal town or city has the necessary conditions such as safe, clean, convenient and so on.
>> and I think that an ideal town is safe, clean, convenient and so on.
Because I live alone, so I think that the safe is one of the important things when I choose the residence.
>> Because I live alone, so I think that safety is one of the most important things to consider when choosing a residence.
Also I have not a car and I would like to go out somewhere,
>> Also, I don\'t have a car and I would like to go out somewhere.
therefore the town or city should be convenient for transportation.
>> CORRECT
Finally, these days I have started to think about health, in other words, well-being.
>> CORRECT
So I would like to go to nature (or eco) friendly place, too.
>> So I would like to go to an Eco-friendly place.
Thank you for answering my call today. Please take a rest and try to relax your mind.
Don\'t think too much of your work nor your future. Just enjoy what life throws at you for now.
Q. Describe your ideal town or city, why you would want to live there, and what you would do there.
I should consider many things to decide the residence,
>> CORRECT
and I think ideal town or city has the necessary conditions such as safe, clean, convenient and so on.
>> and I think that an ideal town is safe, clean, convenient and so on.
Because I live alone, so I think that the safe is one of the important things when I choose the residence.
>> Because I live alone, so I think that safety is one of the most important things to consider when choosing a residence.
Also I have not a car and I would like to go out somewhere,
>> Also, I don\'t have a car and I would like to go out somewhere.
therefore the town or city should be convenient for transportation.
>> CORRECT
Finally, these days I have started to think about health, in other words, well-being.
>> CORRECT
So I would like to go to nature (or eco) friendly place, too.
>> So I would like to go to an Eco-friendly place.
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