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2014-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

학생이 쓴 원문

Yes, I think. Because all of people want to be happy. So wr should be more help them to have hope about their life. And our life is unfairness. If we hsve a rich fathet, we are high probability of rich life. So they would be fall in crime easyily.

강사 첨삭

Hello there! Thanks for expressing your opinion. Please check the corrections that I gave. See you tomorrow! ~T. Jessie~ Yes, I think. >> Correct! Because all of people want to be happy. >> Because all people want to be happy. So wr should be more help them to have hope about their life. >> So we should help them more for them to have hope in their lives. And our life is unfairness. >> And our life is unfair. If we hsve a rich fathet, we are high probability of rich life. >> If we have a rich father, there is a higher probability of rich life. So they would be fall in crime easyily. >> So they will be easily tempted to do crimes.

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