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학생이 쓴 원문
first- growing my company.
I love my job. and I want maintain my job.
That reason is working hard everyday for me.
second- excercise hobby.
Recently I feel that I will be more and more weak. because I worked on chair and don’t excercise.
therefore I started going to gym.
I want going to gym everyday. and I will make a excercise hobby
third- make more friend.
I have a few friend. because I worked everyday.
the past I doesn’t feel lonely. but recently I feel emotional trouble.
I want that make a friend and sharing the emotion.
fourth- continue study english
the past just I thought studied english. because I very busy everyday
But now I study english everyday. though I don't have a time like a past
I think education make a different according to mind
fifth- make a girlfriend.
That is very privacy but I really want thing. I have some emotion trouble.
I effort everyday will be a good man. and I want meet a good woman.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
I do hope that you can achieve all of your goals this year because I know you can learn from all of this experiences.
I am very happy to read your goals in life because this activities are beneficial for you. In addition, it can also help you improve you skills in English, as a result you\'ll be successful in life. Thank you very much!!!
T. Jeny
first- growing my company.
>>My first goal is open a company.I love my job. and I want maintain my job.
>>I love my job and I want to stay in this industry for the rest of my life.That reason is working hard everyday for me.
>>Fo that reason, I will work hard.second- excercise hobby.
>>Secondly, I want excersing be my hobby.Recently I feel that I will be more and more weak. because I worked on chair and don’t excercise.
>>Recently, I am becoming weaker because I always seat on my chair and don\'t have time to exercise.therefore I started going to gym.
>>That\'s why, I started going to gym.I want going to gym everyday. and I will make a excercise hobby
>>I want going to the gym be my hobby.third- make more friend.
>>Third, I want to make friends.I have a few friend. because I worked everyday.
>>I only have a few friends because I work everyday.the past I doesn’t feel lonely. but recently I feel emotional trouble.
>>In the past, I don\'t feel lonely, but now, I feel emotionally troubled.I want that make a friend and sharing the emotion.
>>I want to rely my feelins with a friend.fourth- continue study english
>>My foruth dream is to continue learning Englsih.the past just I thought studied english. because I very busy everyday
>>In the past, I just thought of studying English because I was busy.But now I study english everyday. though I don\'t have a time like a past
>>But now, I study English everyday.I think education make a different according to mind
>>I think education can change my mind set.fifth- make a girlfriend.
>>And lastly, I want to have a girlfriend.That is very privacy but I really want thing. I have some emotion trouble.
>>It is a private thing but I really want a girlfriend to help me with my emotional problems.I effort everyday will be a good man. and I want meet a good woman.
>>I try to be a nice person, to meet a good woman.
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